Me and Mojo – Have a Chat

I wrote this for a class and just rediscovered it while I was cleaning up some old files.  Thought I would share it. It made me chuckle as the assignment was to write a dialogue, any dialogue.  So here it is!


Me and Mojo- Have a Chat

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“Hey mojo, why after all the things we have been through, why would you just walk out on me?” Wringing my hands I hold my breath silently praying that mojo will return to me.

“I needed a break.  You just don’t understand. When we get together I feel like we are going 100 miles per hour and I am just exhausted.”

“I understand, but together we get so much done.  Mojo, how will I get those assignments written if you are taking a coffee break?”

“I need coffee, you really push me hard.”

“PUSH YOU?!?  It’s your own fault.  When you are in full gear, I can’t keep up with you.”  I pause for dramatic effect.  “Do you understand that when we are in sync that we do great things.  I really need you to come back so I can get this assignment done.”

“Let’s compromise, I will stop by just long enough for you to like the start of the assignment then I will take my bre—“

“—Oh no you don’t,” taking a deep breath and exhaling slowly and quite audibly, “not again! Please.  When you do that – OH the trees I waste!  So many rewrites. You need to be here for this.  I need you to finish this assignment!”

“I just want to chill, and the assignment means I have to be all creative.”

“Well you know once you get started you will have fun.  You know that you just need a spark. Remember our last assignment?  Remember how good it felt when we started creating that plot line?”

“Oh yeah I remember it was pretty awesome!”

“So come on Mojo, you wanna  give it a shot? Come on back and we can start with a mind map.”

“NO! Free write—if I come back—I wanna do a free write!”

“Free write it is!  I am so excited you’re here!”

“Yeah me too so, grab a pencil and paper. OH get the highlighters too!”

“I already have them—so what should write about?”

“I think we should work on our book. Maybe do some dialogue work?”

“Great idea!  Thanks mojo for coming back.  I missed you!”

“I missed you too!”


 

 

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Janet Evanovich = HOOKED

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Talk about a writer that used POV and characters in an elegant way.  I started reading this series on the recommendation of my beloved husband.  He started listening to them last year on audio and I would often hear him chuckling are outright laughing.  He got me to watch the movie of One for the Money with Kathrine Heigel and I thought, sure I will read the books this was a cute story.  I read One for the Money quickly dived into Two for the Dough which was just as good as the first. I am in the que for the third book and am very excited to read it.

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I have been reading many books on the craft of writing alongside these books and one of the things I noticed is the POV and character depth in this series of books is awesome.I love the voice of Stephanie Plum.  She is a no nonsense gal that is willing to admit her faults.

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She does however always seem to  persevere, even if it is with help, over adversaries.  I love that the characters in her books all have depth.  I feel like I understand Stephanie.  She has a past with the cop in the first book and it causes struggles for her that so far has continued through the books. This relationship adds a rich component to the stories. Morelli is both a friend and to quote Stephanie “pain in the ass”. Her relationships are not just deep with one character but all the characters in the books. I enjoy seeing and experiencing the relationships the other characters have with Stephanie.  I especially love that she and Rex are so close and her reaction when he is in peril in book two.  It was memorable.

One of my favorite things about how Ms Evanovich writes these novels is that she takes the first person POV.  I personally have been unable to perfect this POV and I study her work, because it is perfected here.  I truly enjoy this POV because I feel like the person telling the story is vested.  I feel like the story is much richer by using this POV.

 

Finally, these books envelop the people that read them. You truly feel like you are in the middle of Trenton with Stephanie, Lulu, Ranger, Morelli, Grandma Mauzer, Mom, Dad, Uncle Vinne, Connie and of course Rex.  I enjoy returning to her world and disappearing from mine.

I not only feel comfortable recommending these books but encourage you to take the time to read them.  Truly enjoyment reading.

If you are a writer, take note of how well Evanovich pushes the reader through the chapters, leaving the questions at the end of each chapter thrusting the reader forward into the book.  She is truly a master at this and is worth studying.

Enjoy!

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Writer’s Digest – Short Story Competition

OH I am doing it!  I just finished cutting a short story to meet the 1500 word max for the  2016 Writer’s Digest Short Story Competition.  I am nervous and excited all at the same time.  Let me tell you cutting 500+ words from something you already felt was bare bones was tough–but I realized something in the process.  Cutting can be liberating.  This story had a few places that lagged.  I didn’t realize it at first.  Then I cut, and then sliced, and then cut again. Words that I felt were anchoring the story really were re-workable!  At first the words battled for their rightful place, then as I removed them and worked on finding better more concise ways to keep the imagery and meet the word count I found the ship didn’t need as many anchors.  It as a challenge, there are still some words that were sent to the story graveyard that are begging for resurrection but alas, they are doomed to rest in peace. What have I come to understand from this process?

  1. Concrete Details can be over used.  I like to be descriptive in my writing, but I found that I may tend to over describe. This can be tedious. I suggest looking in your work for repetitive descriptions.  *Finding that I like to mention that my protag likes to “shift” in chairs, from foot to foot etc.  While this does SHOW nervousness, tension, boredom and a host of other feelings it can be over used.
  2. Cutting words can make a better story – sometimes, our words get in the way of a good story.  Reader’s may need to be able to read what we see in our heads, they also can be overwhelmed with too much information.  If you can convey a mental picture of your setting, then do it in a few words. Do they really need to know that the desk your protag sits at is the third one in from the main door?  If that will come into play in the action portion of your writing then write it, if not leave it out!
  3. How to find places to cut – First look at your speech tags, are they needed?  NO, cut it! easy way to get rid of unneeded words. Next, look at the descriptions, have you used two words that essentially mean the same thing?  An antag that is vicious and cruel can be described once as vicious and later as cruel– have you made her both in one sentence? Yes? cut one of them.  Also look for words that steal space: very, really, just and the ever overused “so” well, you get the idea. Finally if you have dialogue it is a fast place to find unneeded words- often we can say what we mean in less words but don’t!  Give it a try not only in your story but the real world too!
  4. It is scary to decide to enter a contest and have the possibility of rejection. The good thing about rejection is it is only one more knocked on door to success.  Each time you put yourself out there you are one step closer to a “yes”.

This concludes my thoughts on the 2016 Short Story Contest for Writer’s Digest, now I need to go proof-read and submit.

You have until January 15th to enter the contest. I look forward to the competition.  Check it out here. Writer’s Digest Short Story Contest. 

Keep Writing!